I just visited your project webpage. First, I must say I like your webpage design. It is nice, simple, and easy to navigate. Second, I read your Story "Sports All Day." I really liked it. It is such an original concept. I would have never thought about writing a story about a talk radio show host commenting on an upcoming boxing match. I was wondering if you will carry on that idea to different stories with different characters. I like the way you built the tension between Ryan and John. Maybe you could have the talk show host talk about a press conference between the two fighters, when they first announced the fight. There always seems to be drama trauma when two fighters meet during a press conference. Also, what if you add some statistics about the fighters for the radio talk show host to talk about. For example, height, weight, arm length, age, and previous fighting records. I had some trouble visualizing what the fighters looked like. The add statistics would help that. Overall, I thought the story was unique and clever. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Hey Eric! I visited your portfolio website and gave it a look through. I like the design and layout, especially the picture of the clouds, but you could use a more “Indian Epics” themed picture (or even a boxing theme picture for your story) if you wanted to really connect your story with the website image. I also enjoyed reading your story – interesting take on the battle between Rama and Vishvamitra. I personally am really bad at remembering all the names in the Indian epics and have been confusing them quite a lot, and Rama was involved in several different battles so I didn’t particularly recall this specific one. If other people have similar issues, you could also try adding a short summary of the original story in your author’s note? Other than that, I thought your author’s note did a great job of explaining your reasoning and motivation for writing this story that way!
Hi Eric! First, your story is giving me Creed vibes. I can't remember, but I think your personal introduction said you were into boxing as well? If so, I think it's great that you're incorporating your love of boxing into your story. A story is always easier to read when an author is knowledgeable and connected to their subject material. There were a few times that I got lost during the story, but your explanation at the end really cleared everything up. What kind of questions are the callers going to ask? Like just why you think he deserves a chance? Are you going to have angry people calling in that are really against Ryan? I think it be cool to see a mix of both angry and hopeful callers. I'm excited to see where your story goes!
Hi Eric! i love your idea of coming from a radio station, that is so cool and very unique. it immediately gave me a great experience while reading your story. The design of your site is great and you used great pictures as well. Are you going to use the idea of talking as a radio show host the entire time? i liked hearing about the fight and you give a great description of that. you did an awesome job of putting your sports twist on an old indian epic which is really cool. I like how you incorporated your own liking of sports into a fight that was important in Rama's life. Good job!
I just had the opportunity to explore your project website. It is truly a great experience for your readers. The layout is very user friendly and visually appealing. I really enjoyed the pictures that you have chosen to incorporate throughout your website as well. Your first story was wonderful. I loved how you were writing from the point of view of a radio host. This was one of the more engaging reads that I have seen in any portfolio project. It is very clever and original. I also really enjoyed your story titled Gangs of New York. This caught my eye because there is a movie with the same title and it is one of my absolute favorites. You should check it out sometime. You picked a great setting for this story. Overall, your website looks great and I am looking forward to reading more as the semester progresses.
Hi Eric! Your Portfolio looks amazing! I truly love your background layout! It looks simple and elegant! Your stories are awesome as well. I love how creative and the imaginations you put in, especially with the Sports All Day story! It was awesome that you made your story to relate about boxing as well. It was also very creative that you changed the names of the original characters to the modern names of this century. After reading your story, it actually made me feel like I was in the scene. You pretty much allured the readers into your story which is the point and important overall! Therefore, you did an awesome job at that. Also, you did a wonderful job on providing a descriptive background for your author’s note. It made me understand why you chose this story and how you interpret it into your own. Overall, well done, Eric!
I enjoyed reading your stories. I like that first story you have especially because it has a boxing kind of feel to it. That was great. I can see your creativity coming through my laptop screen in the way that you wrote both of your stories. You did a great job off explaining the why behind you writing your stories in the Authors Note! I almost wish your Authors Note was at the beginning of your stories because I think I would be able to understand the story a little better. I did get a little off track in your first story. Other than that your portfolio is great and I am looking forward to reading more from you!
Hi Eric, your stories were very interesting. They were both very riveting and suspenseful because of how well you built up to the climax of the story. The commentator speculating who would win the big boxing match contributed to this. Maybe you could included some interview snippets with the two boxers so that the reader can get to know them a little more and become more invested in the outcome of the match. I definitely got a better picture of some of the battle scenes in the stories we have read. They are buried in elaborate language and fantasy, so it is sometimes hard to see that they are just like the modern day conflicts you have illustrated in your stories. How did the gangs arise and learn to hate each other so much? Developing this in the introduction might be helpful. Your illustration of JD and RJ was very good; I was able to vividly picture the two characters. Good job!
Hi Eric, I had the chance to read your Sports Radio Story as well as your Gangs of New York story. First off, I really like the Sports radio telling of a boxing match. It was somewhat reminiscent of Rocky III when Rocky strategically tires out Lang. It would have been interesting if there was a comment on a pre-match presser to see if we got more background information into why the two are fighting, or what happens next. I think you did a good job of spicing up and modernizing the fight between Rama and Thataka. I also really like the Gangs of New York story. You did a great job of setting up the exposition of the story, and it almost seemed like it could be a drama about the life of the head of a mob group. Overall, I really enjoyed both of these stories, I hope you have a great semester!
Hi Eric! Your second story started off perfectly.You gave such vivid descriptions of your main characters. The story itself had a lot of action, which I liked. There were a few times I got confused between RJ and JD. Maybe trying using a different name for one of them. You did a good job with your paragraph flow and transitioning. And I think this story idea is a really unique way to retell the original. The connection with the sunset was awesome! Overall, I think you did a great job executing the idea you had. Everything felt very gang-like. You added subtleties like "jet-black Ferrari" and "most elegant of Italian suits" that added flavor to the story. I think this is my favorite of the two stories you wrote so far! I just like how dramatic this one is. But who knows, I might like your next story even better!
Hey Eric! I just want to start off by saying that I totally loved your story! The creativity and imagination that was integrated with your writing was superb! I can see you put a lot of hard work and time into your story! Keep it up! I liked your use of dialogue. It really brought the characters to life. I was able to relate even more with the characters and get into their minds. I also would like to comment on your web site page! I have to say it looks really great! Comparing mine to yours, I want to put more work into mine! I was able to easily navigate through the web page, which was very nice. However, I look forward to reading more of your stories! Good luck with the rest of your semester! It is coming close to an end! Also, have a great weekend!
Hi Eric! I like that your stories are all different.
The first story was interesting, and I really liked how there were small hints about Ryan's father. Unfortunately, from the shift of the radio broadcast to the live broadcast of the boxing match made things a little confusing for me. I think you could actually just put the story into the present, having it all be done during the boxing match. You can still do introductions of Ryan and Thaddeus, but it would make the story flow better. It was an interesting interpretation of Rama though! I liked it.
The second story was pretty cool too. I kept getting the gangs and their leaders mixed up though, because their names are so similar. It was a pretty gruesome story and I liked that it kept that element that was present in the original.
I really liked your third story. It was creative and it really kept my attention as I read through it. I like how it ends, because it feels very much like a parable and I felt like there was a real lesson about how to treat others.
Hey Eric, I just visited your page and I really like how you designed it looks really cool and is very easy to navigate around too. It also really helps make it even more interesting that you made all of your stories. I know with my own page all of my stories are similar to one another, so this was an exciting difference to see.
The first story was pretty good ,but the shift from the radio to the actual match was a little confusing for me. Other than that it seemed to flow really well to me and was very interesting.
I liked how in the second story you kept the gruesomeness of it intact from the original. I know i have changed the outcomes in some of mine but it is good to see a tragic story kept that way.
The third story was really creative and was so easy to follow along to.
Hey Eric! I just visited your portfolio project, and it looks really great! It was cool to see how different your stories are from another. I thought your first story was interesting and clever because you wrote it as a radio show. I have read anything like that yet from the other projects. A suggestion I have is maybe see if you can make the image bigger on your first story, so it's not small. Also, others gave me a suggestion on my own portfolio project to include a story list on my home page. In addition, I enjoyed reading your other two stories. You did a good job writing them and including enough details. I thought the way you retold the stories was nice and interesting. Overall, I thought you did a great job on your stories! Good luck on the rest of your semester, and hope everything goes well!
Hi Eric!
ReplyDeleteI just visited your project webpage. First, I must say I like your webpage design. It is nice, simple, and easy to navigate. Second, I read your Story "Sports All Day." I really liked it. It is such an original concept. I would have never thought about writing a story about a talk radio show host commenting on an upcoming boxing match. I was wondering if you will carry on that idea to different stories with different characters. I like the way you built the tension between Ryan and John. Maybe you could have the talk show host talk about a press conference between the two fighters, when they first announced the fight. There always seems to be drama trauma when two fighters meet during a press conference. Also, what if you add some statistics about the fighters for the radio talk show host to talk about. For example, height, weight, arm length, age, and previous fighting records. I had some trouble visualizing what the fighters looked like. The add statistics would help that. Overall, I thought the story was unique and clever. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Hey Eric! I visited your portfolio website and gave it a look through. I like the design and layout, especially the picture of the clouds, but you could use a more “Indian Epics” themed picture (or even a boxing theme picture for your story) if you wanted to really connect your story with the website image. I also enjoyed reading your story – interesting take on the battle between Rama and Vishvamitra. I personally am really bad at remembering all the names in the Indian epics and have been confusing them quite a lot, and Rama was involved in several different battles so I didn’t particularly recall this specific one. If other people have similar issues, you could also try adding a short summary of the original story in your author’s note? Other than that, I thought your author’s note did a great job of explaining your reasoning and motivation for writing this story that way!
ReplyDeleteHi Eric! First, your story is giving me Creed vibes. I can't remember, but I think your personal introduction said you were into boxing as well? If so, I think it's great that you're incorporating your love of boxing into your story. A story is always easier to read when an author is knowledgeable and connected to their subject material. There were a few times that I got lost during the story, but your explanation at the end really cleared everything up. What kind of questions are the callers going to ask? Like just why you think he deserves a chance? Are you going to have angry people calling in that are really against Ryan? I think it be cool to see a mix of both angry and hopeful callers. I'm excited to see where your story goes!
ReplyDeleteHi Eric! i love your idea of coming from a radio station, that is so cool and very unique. it immediately gave me a great experience while reading your story. The design of your site is great and you used great pictures as well. Are you going to use the idea of talking as a radio show host the entire time? i liked hearing about the fight and you give a great description of that. you did an awesome job of putting your sports twist on an old indian epic which is really cool. I like how you incorporated your own liking of sports into a fight that was important in Rama's life. Good job!
ReplyDeleteHi Eric,
ReplyDeleteI just had the opportunity to explore your project website. It is truly a great experience for your readers. The layout is very user friendly and visually appealing. I really enjoyed the pictures that you have chosen to incorporate throughout your website as well. Your first story was wonderful. I loved how you were writing from the point of view of a radio host. This was one of the more engaging reads that I have seen in any portfolio project. It is very clever and original. I also really enjoyed your story titled Gangs of New York. This caught my eye because there is a movie with the same title and it is one of my absolute favorites. You should check it out sometime. You picked a great setting for this story. Overall, your website looks great and I am looking forward to reading more as the semester progresses.
-Andy
Hi Eric! Your Portfolio looks amazing! I truly love your background layout! It looks simple and elegant! Your stories are awesome as well. I love how creative and the imaginations you put in, especially with the Sports All Day story! It was awesome that you made your story to relate about boxing as well. It was also very creative that you changed the names of the original characters to the modern names of this century. After reading your story, it actually made me feel like I was in the scene. You pretty much allured the readers into your story which is the point and important overall! Therefore, you did an awesome job at that. Also, you did a wonderful job on providing a descriptive background for your author’s note. It made me understand why you chose this story and how you interpret it into your own. Overall, well done, Eric!
ReplyDeleteHello Eric!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your stories. I like that first story you have especially because it has a boxing kind of feel to it. That was great. I can see your creativity coming through my laptop screen in the way that you wrote both of your stories. You did a great job off explaining the why behind you writing your stories in the Authors Note! I almost wish your Authors Note was at the beginning of your stories because I think I would be able to understand the story a little better. I did get a little off track in your first story. Other than that your portfolio is great and I am looking forward to reading more from you!
Hi Eric, your stories were very interesting. They were both very riveting and suspenseful because of how well you built up to the climax of the story. The commentator speculating who would win the big boxing match contributed to this. Maybe you could included some interview snippets with the two boxers so that the reader can get to know them a little more and become more invested in the outcome of the match. I definitely got a better picture of some of the battle scenes in the stories we have read. They are buried in elaborate language and fantasy, so it is sometimes hard to see that they are just like the modern day conflicts you have illustrated in your stories. How did the gangs arise and learn to hate each other so much? Developing this in the introduction might be helpful. Your illustration of JD and RJ was very good; I was able to vividly picture the two characters. Good job!
ReplyDeleteHi Eric, I had the chance to read your Sports Radio Story as well as your Gangs of New York story. First off, I really like the Sports radio telling of a boxing match. It was somewhat reminiscent of Rocky III when Rocky strategically tires out Lang. It would have been interesting if there was a comment on a pre-match presser to see if we got more background information into why the two are fighting, or what happens next. I think you did a good job of spicing up and modernizing the fight between Rama and Thataka. I also really like the Gangs of New York story. You did a great job of setting up the exposition of the story, and it almost seemed like it could be a drama about the life of the head of a mob group. Overall, I really enjoyed both of these stories, I hope you have a great semester!
ReplyDeleteHi Eric! Your second story started off perfectly.You gave such vivid descriptions of your main characters. The story itself had a lot of action, which I liked. There were a few times I got confused between RJ and JD. Maybe trying using a different name for one of them. You did a good job with your paragraph flow and transitioning. And I think this story idea is a really unique way to retell the original. The connection with the sunset was awesome! Overall, I think you did a great job executing the idea you had. Everything felt very gang-like. You added subtleties like "jet-black Ferrari" and "most elegant of Italian suits" that added flavor to the story. I think this is my favorite of the two stories you wrote so far! I just like how dramatic this one is. But who knows, I might like your next story even better!
ReplyDeleteHey Eric! I just want to start off by saying that I totally loved your story! The creativity and imagination that was integrated with your writing was superb! I can see you put a lot of hard work and time into your story! Keep it up! I liked your use of dialogue. It really brought the characters to life. I was able to relate even more with the characters and get into their minds. I also would like to comment on your web site page! I have to say it looks really great! Comparing mine to yours, I want to put more work into mine! I was able to easily navigate through the web page, which was very nice. However, I look forward to reading more of your stories! Good luck with the rest of your semester! It is coming close to an end! Also, have a great weekend!
ReplyDeleteHi Eric! I like that your stories are all different.
ReplyDeleteThe first story was interesting, and I really liked how there were small hints about Ryan's father. Unfortunately, from the shift of the radio broadcast to the live broadcast of the boxing match made things a little confusing for me. I think you could actually just put the story into the present, having it all be done during the boxing match. You can still do introductions of Ryan and Thaddeus, but it would make the story flow better. It was an interesting interpretation of Rama though! I liked it.
The second story was pretty cool too. I kept getting the gangs and their leaders mixed up though, because their names are so similar. It was a pretty gruesome story and I liked that it kept that element that was present in the original.
I really liked your third story. It was creative and it really kept my attention as I read through it. I like how it ends, because it feels very much like a parable and I felt like there was a real lesson about how to treat others.
Hey Eric,
ReplyDeleteI just visited your page and I really like how you designed it looks really cool and is very easy to navigate around too. It also really helps make it even more interesting that you made all of your stories. I know with my own page all of my stories are similar to one another, so this was an exciting difference to see.
The first story was pretty good ,but the shift from the radio to the actual match was a little confusing for me. Other than that it seemed to flow really well to me and was very interesting.
I liked how in the second story you kept the gruesomeness of it intact from the original. I know i have changed the outcomes in some of mine but it is good to see a tragic story kept that way.
The third story was really creative and was so easy to follow along to.
Hey Eric!
ReplyDeleteI just visited your portfolio project, and it looks really great! It was cool to see how different your stories are from another. I thought your first story was interesting and clever because you wrote it as a radio show. I have read anything like that yet from the other projects. A suggestion I have is maybe see if you can make the image bigger on your first story, so it's not small. Also, others gave me a suggestion on my own portfolio project to include a story list on my home page. In addition, I enjoyed reading your other two stories. You did a good job writing them and including enough details. I thought the way you retold the stories was nice and interesting. Overall, I thought you did a great job on your stories! Good luck on the rest of your semester, and hope everything goes well!